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My colour is all of the crimson shades.
It is the liquid that pours after skin meets the blade.
The glow that appears on embarrassed cheeks,
And the hues that emerge when the sunset peaks.

It sounds like the crackle of a wood-burning fire.
When the boom of two quickening heart beats transpire.
And the billowing voices of a church-singing choir.

It tastes of the reddest and rarest of meat,
Like those tiny heart-shaped cinnamon sweets.
And lingers and burns with a chilli peppers heat.

It feels like the deepest roots of real pain.
And the lowest point of desperate shame.
It's the passion and power deep within your heart
And the inspiration that creates all beautiful art.
For the Color Poem Contest [link]

In Canada we spell color like colour...so thats how I spelt it in the poem :highfive:
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love your use of rhyme here; the rhythm is a touch off in places, but, for the most part, the rhyme feels like a natural part of the poem.

I think the first two stanzas are the strongest; the last two fell a bit flat for me. I think it started getting a little repetitive by that point, a little too like a list if that makes any sense ^^;
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jessica35 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
Thanks for the comment! I agree with the list thing. Thanks for pointing that out.
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starell Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012
I am very impressed! This is such a beautiful poem! I love your rhyme and rhythm; it just flows sooo beautifully. Very nice job!
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jessica35 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012
Thank you kindly :pat:
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starell Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012
of course!
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GlassShields Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, this is really amazing. I think this is one of the best poems I've seen on dA. :D
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jessica35 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012
Wow, what a complement! Thanks a bunch :boogie:
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GlassShields Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. ^^
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Milizha Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
Awesome!:)
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jessica35 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
Thank you
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